Weight-loss program
48, 47, 46...She struggled to shed the last one kilo. Starvation, colonic irrigation, laxatives, smoking, vomiting. Nothing worked. She stood solid at 46 kilos. So tantalisingly close to her target and yet, so bloody hard. Her bulk just refused to come off any further. That's when she came up with the idea. A kitchen knife in hand, she stood on the scales. Drip, drip, drip...and the weight started sliding. 50 gms, 200 gms, half-a-kilo and finally! There! The needle settled on the magic number - 45. Plop! Her fingers fell to the floor and she swooned.
"He saw her. She looked away. He saw her again. She looked away again. And there went another precious day."
ReplyDeletefor those wondering, its my take at a quick tale and for those wondering still...no, it has no deeper meaning, it just pretends to be deep, when it's as shallow as you see it.
This quick tale thing has become something like the story of the emperor's new clothes ...nobody sees the point of it , but since everybody else goes "Brilliant", "Awesome", "Lovely", the rest that don't want to look like fools follow suit in the parade ...
the first anonymous commenter should probably respect the intelligence of the other commenters. But it would have been a better fit with the theme for the previous post "quick tale 55"!
ReplyDeleteAnyway, this story reminded me of another about the hairdresser of the king getting 6 and a half pots of gold and in his futile attempt to make it 7 full pots he becomes a stingy, poor man.
-Anon2
Don't let any half baked celebs read this... otherwise we'll have Lindsay Lohan walking around with an arm missing!
ReplyDeleteAnd to anon 1 "Huh?"
Thanks for the tip off! Will def try and make it to some of the screenings
ReplyDeletehey....Ammani...some people get obsessed with things so trivial !.....how true ......
ReplyDelete@Anonymous :
didnt use Brilliant", "Awesome", "Lovely", ...happy ??
sorry - don't get the point -does a finger weigh a kilo?
ReplyDeleteOCD exemplified beautifully. A slight hint of suicidal tendency tho. I'm starting to get worried here...lol
ReplyDeleteooops ... thts too much of desparation .. ouch
ReplyDeleteHey, anon-1, your not seeing meaning in these stories does not imply that no meaning exists.
ReplyDeleteThe depth in these stories, in my opinion, is that the interpretation is left to the reader. Like a poem. Or an uncaptioned photograph.
Also, your short story is pretty dumb.
well said anon 2!
ReplyDeleteand anon 1 if you don't get it don't read it!
Pretty gruesome.
ReplyDelete(There, anon1, happy?)
Hopefully, she stopped at 45 :)
ReplyDeleteooh, gruesome. Who was that king who carved off a pound of flesh to pay off someone or other? Cant remember his name.
ReplyDeleteHey Anon, let the world know you have an opinion but do it openly. Dont hide behind anonymity.
ReplyDeleteGruesome is the only word I can think of and I know I am repeating here! But it just is gruesome and ghastly
ReplyDelete@Shyam
ReplyDeleteI think the king you are talking about is Sibi Rana
i second Wicked Angel's comments..
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TLB
ooo .. that was a grusome twist !
ReplyDeleteare we allowed to put logic to these short stories :-)
"A Tiny Little Firefly and the Big Bad Fire Engine Named Camphor"
ReplyDeleteIt shone. He tried to cover it. It shone bright. He desperately tried to cover it. Yet it kept on shining dazzlingly bright.
So, finally, he tried to strangle it with his strong kosher hands ... only to see his fingers catch fire ... and vanish into nothingness.
[A tribute(!) to Anon 1]
Then a few minutes later a hawker passed by. He was selling helium balloons. He had been delayed a few minutes because he had to buy pastries for his daughter's birthday.
ReplyDeleteI was reminded about this post when I read your quick tale.
ReplyDeleteI guess the one who commented at 8:56 PM tried to liken anonym 1 to camphor and Ammani to the fire that anonym 1 mistook as a firefly.
ReplyDeleteNiren's comments seem to be more of a tangent to that one, and hence diluting, or am I missing something here???
And BTW, anonym 1, the depth of interpretation is directly proportional to the richness of reader's past experiences, openness to others' views/ideas (I acknowledge your view, but respectfully oppose it), and of course, level of intellectual/emotional maturity.
There was only one Newton who dared intepret the falling of apple in a richer/different way than all the anonyms had been doing for ages!
- Anonym 101
i wonder if anyone ever gets that desperate ONLY to lose weight..there has to be more behind this desperation than just that.
ReplyDeletean aside:shyam that was in 'the merchant of venice', where shylock demands a pound of flesh from antonio.
Oh no! HORROR story!!
ReplyDeleteBut I like the way you think :-)
Good post!
Anonym 101 - If she had waited for a few minutes, she would have found a less painful solution to her percieved problem. Or she could have waited until the next day when the mailman would have delivered her a coupon for a 50% discount at the local liposuction clinic.
ReplyDeleteAah! that's really negative!
ReplyDeleteBut you surely make me imagine... what you want me to :)
Niren,
ReplyDeleteNow get your point.
Thanks,
Anonym 101
Brilliant! Awesome!
ReplyDeleteThis is sick!!! How can anybody cut ones fingers off to reduce weight. I have never heard of any 'freak' doing this. Only psychos do such things and I dont think psychos care about their weight! I have begun to wonder why Ammani getting 'darker' by day?
ReplyDeleteRaga
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This is sick!!! How can anybody cut ones fingers off to reduce weight. I have never heard of any 'freak' doing this. Only psychos do such things and I dont think psychos care about their weight! I have begun to wonder why Ammani getting 'darker' by day?
ReplyDeleteRaga
http://gumkha.blogspot.com
This is sick!!! How can anybody cut ones fingers off to reduce weight. I have never heard of any 'freak' doing this. Only psychos do such things and I dont think psychos care about their weight! I have begun to wonder why Ammani getting 'darker' by day?
ReplyDeleteRaga
http://gumkha.blogspot.com